Monday, June 01, 2009

cluds
creepin nar -
gey lik a weir




clouds
creeping closer -
just like a war

8 comments:

  1. Oh the perpetual rain wars! :)

    Good one, John

    wishes,
    devika

    ReplyDelete
  2. Very powerful John.

    ReplyDelete
  3. ... creeping in, to release the barrage.

    Strong simily, John!

    ReplyDelete
  4. we got some showers on June 1st

    much love
    gillena

    ReplyDelete
  5. a truce agreement --
    the sun
    peeping

    ReplyDelete
  6. The ice-cold tripple c and the multilayer of "like" make this a great one to me.

    Best wishes
    Ralf

    ReplyDelete
  7. I like it but I don't know if there's a better word than 'creeping' - perhaps just simply

    clouds
    coming closer
    just like war

    the ambiguity of 'just' is striking!

    best,
    Gwilym

    ReplyDelete

Note: Only a member of this blog may post a comment.