Wednesday, August 22, 2012

muinless nicht -
i the derk watter
the mudge o sterns




moonless night  -
in the dark river
the movement of stars

2 comments:

  1. I like the idea but I think the adjective 'dark' may be superfluous - saying the same thing twice.

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  2. Might the movement be specified as a ripple?

    moonless night –
    in the river
    rippling stars

    Just a thought

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