Thursday, January 17, 2008

a lift fou o sterns -
clinkin o glesses
dirr o the crack




a sky full of stars -
clinking of glasses
hum of conversation

5 comments:

  1. it makes me think of summer nights - thank you, I need that :)

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  2. Nice john, I think the two line, first and last line, could actually stand alone.

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  3. Like Anton Pavlovitš Chekhov in that L2?

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  4. Very atmospheric - really capturing the expanse on a small and large scale.

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