well pointed out vaughn: the fault lies with me. this is a toddler! a child starting to walk he is not in a pram he is in a push-chair (duly changed) your interpretation would be for a baby in a pram exploring his surroundings.so between us we have created two haiku for different periods in the little fellows life well done!!!! john
I love this one so much I can't resist suggesting how I'd prefer to see it formatted (please forgive me):
ReplyDeletea toddler explores
his pram...fills with
cherry blossoms.
well pointed out vaughn: the fault lies with me. this is a toddler! a child starting to walk he is not in a pram he is in a push-chair (duly changed) your interpretation would be for a baby in a pram exploring his surroundings.so between us we have created two haiku for different periods in the little fellows life well done!!!!
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oh, this is lovely!
ReplyDeleteI see...your explanation/tweak really adds. Well done.
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