Friday, April 27, 2007

the tottie reenges -
his buggy
fouin wi gean flourish

the toddler explores -
his push-chair
filling with cherry blossom


  1. I love this one so much I can't resist suggesting how I'd prefer to see it formatted (please forgive me):

    a toddler explores
    his pram...fills with
    cherry blossoms.

  2. well pointed out vaughn: the fault lies with me. this is a toddler! a child starting to walk he is not in a pram he is in a push-chair (duly changed) your interpretation would be for a baby in a pram exploring his between us we have created two haiku for different periods in the little fellows life well done!!!!

  3. oh, this is lovely!

  4. I see...your explanation/tweak really adds. Well done.


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