Tuesday, October 05, 2010

swans gaither
...bit the day the bodach
maits the wirms




swans gather
...but today the old man
feeds the worms

9 comments:

  1. I don't know if it should have done, but this one made me chuckle. Thanks

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  2. Very wistful John. Many ways to read it...

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  3. __Clearly, could be read as a
    -life cycle- that continued revolvement; yes the amusement, the chuckle, fully understood.
    __John, as always, a fine one!
    _m

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  4. A fine one, John...

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  5. Would it be even better without "..." or even without "...but" I wonder?

    swans gather
    but today the old man
    feeds the worms

    or

    swans gather
    today the old man
    feeds the worms

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  6. I didn't get a chuckle here, rather i find image touching, John...for more reasons than one,

    wishes,
    devika

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  7. very beautiful, light and dark. ( i agree with what the Poet in residence : maybe that but is superfluous.) :)

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