Tuesday, January 12, 2010

burds craik -
platches o green
throuch the snaw




birds clamour -
patches of green
through the snow

8 comments:

  1. green patch
    clamour of birds
    black cat

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  2. Oh yes, green is always there! :)

    platches is interesting, as it rhymes with splashes...and mean the same, in some way,

    wishes,
    devika

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  3. This is very nice John...

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  4. Staying green under the snow, the grass taunts. Nice one John. _m

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  5. I like this. what about changing the clamour as the last line. It can only get better

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  6. Hi John,

    Happy New Year to you and your family! Thanks, as always, for commenting on kami haiku throughout the year.

    kami

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