Tuesday, July 14, 2009

lown dub
a peerie petal faws -
a chitter throuchoot...




still pool
a tiny petal falls -
a shiver throughout...

11 comments:

  1. the last line sent a chilly shiver in me!

    God knows why!
    anyway, good haiku John :)

    wishes,
    devika

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  2. Lovely John, one to read again and again.

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  3. ...even the nano-weight of the petal... is felt. Fine one John. _m

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  4. The pool is a symbol for wealth and/or an erotic promise. In your haiku it is just the surface for a big thing: human emotion. Very good, John.

    Best wishes
    Ralf

    PS: The verification word at the moment is "stones". Sometimes I think these systems know what we think: why not throwing a pebble into this still pool and watching circles?

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  5. took me back to Basho's frog leap

    much love
    gillena

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  6. "...even the nano-weight of the petal... is felt..." So true, Magyar!

    Best wishes,
    Angelika

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  7. you have a fine eye, John. what grace you have been given to see the tenderness of life with such understanding.

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  8. This is one of those 'don't breath or you'll break it' haiku. Beautiful!

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