Friday, March 27, 2009

waukrife -
his pillae
fou o vices




sleepless -
his pillow
full of voices

13 comments:

  1. stunning, John. You're so prolific lately.

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  2. John, this has a haunting quality. Absolutely superb!

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  3. ah I like this one John.

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  4. great, and so true...

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  5. Voices.
    _From the cacophony in the pillow (as I see this) to the wispers of the daffodils. These are standouts, John.
    _m

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  6. remove the pillow, voices still remain!

    good one, John
    I like Magyar's comment....ultimately one finds/should find some peace to sleep well

    wishes,
    devika

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  7. wow! line 3 is wonderful!

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  8. Very good senryu!

    Best wishes
    Ralf

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  9. i want to add to Devika's; i say remove the mouth


    much love
    gillena

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  10. Wonderful, John. This really catches the essence of those sleepless nights.

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