Monday, June 22, 2009

i the smusht
yill bottle:
the drouthie's brucken neb




in the smashed
beer bottle:
the drunk's broken face

13 comments:

  1. excellent stuff

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  2. Oh! horrible...broken face...but a serving of curd can set it right, they say :)

    wishes,
    devika

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  3. you continue to surprise me John - you push this genre further than most... excellent

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  4. Oh!...

    Oh, and now I've seen Devika's comment and she starts with "Oh!" too.

    A good haiku!

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  5. Really well done, John!

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  6. A nice capture John. I agree with Dalloway, you push this genre further than most...

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  7. Another fine one John.
    _m

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  8. well wrought 'broken face' - Aha


    much love
    gillena

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  9. like it John, not the drink and the smashed bottle, but the image ;)

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  10. Great alliteration, wonderful sound: Both versions of this haiku are very present when I read them loud.

    Best wishes
    Ralf

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  11. Oi. :-(

    last drops
    of beer
    lost forever

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  12. I always enjoy your 'drunk' haiku. You have such a good eye for spotting a striking image.

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