Sunday, January 17, 2010

burn in spate -
a reid baw boabbin
airtin fir sundoon




flooded stream -
a red ball bobbing
heading for sunset

8 comments:

  1. Just a thought John, I think a 3rd line 'headed for sunset' might enhance/continue the bobbing image...??

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  2. this trickling image is beautiful...

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  3. sunset could be a good place to head for!

    enjoyed,

    wishes,
    devika

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  4. sated stream
    this quackin' duck chases
    a floatin' ball

    Like this John!
    __The red ball, in my mind's eye, easily seen as a >reflection< of the "reid sundoon." _m

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  5. Ah ha, I see.
    It took me a while to get the compass of this!

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