Saturday, September 26, 2009

cluds riven -
on the burn
blae cloots




clouds torn apart -
on the stream
blue patches

7 comments:

  1. Great alliterion in the first and the last word; though presenting a multiple sound-analogy it is still of discreet character. Love that!

    Best wishes
    Ralf

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  2. Reflective... lovit. _m

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  3. I thought: Oh, I love the sound! (And when I'd read Ralf's comment I did know why.)

    Best wishes,
    Angelika

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  4. As always an enjoyable set here, John :)

    the image of a heron dropping into the poet's mind was fascinating...so was cicadas in the silent forest...

    wishes,
    devika

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  5. love the motion in this - excellent!

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