daffins govein
intae the burn -
teepical narcissi
daffodils gazing
into the stream -
typical narcissi
posted by John McDonald at 5:15 AM
Monday, March 10, 2008
intae the burn -
teepical narcissi
daffodils gazing
into the stream -
typical narcissi
- day efter the gemme - the altar-laddie's bleck ee...
- bleck plastic poke fluthers on the pikit weer - c...
- mairch wunds - chirms, o peerie burds blawn bogsha...
- maggie no shair: tae hunker wi the maws or the cra...
- blawin on the braeside siller birks ...skime o swu...
- throuch the perk coortin kipples - daffins' heids...
- poussin its new buds throuch the razzor-weer - for...
- crcuses - haudin thair bickers up tae the sin ...
- swan risin a fite fan apens swan approaching a...
- leain hame - e'en his sheddae gaes intae the flit...
2 Comments:
ha!
perhaps i would prefer it this way:
gazing
into the stream -
narcissi
it still implies everything without being too explicit
2:23 PM
Or perhaps
daffodils gazing
into the stream . . .
narcissus
suggesting the moment when the connection is made.
Your way is amusing, though. You just have a moment that gets us going!
2:30 PM
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