the tottie reenges -
his buggy
fous wi gean flourish
the toddler explores -
his push-chair
fills with cherry blossom
posted by John McDonald at 1:14 AM
Friday, April 27, 2007
his buggy
fous wi gean flourish
the toddler explores -
his push-chair
fills with cherry blossom
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6 Comments:
Nice!
6:37 AM
I love this one so much I can't resist suggesting how I'd prefer to see it formatted (please forgive me):
a toddler explores
his pram...fills with
cherry blossoms.
6:39 AM
well pointed out vaughn: the fault lies with me. this is a toddler! a child starting to walk he is not in a pram he is in a push-chair (duly changed) your interpretation would be for a baby in a pram exploring his surroundings.so between us we have created two haiku for different periods in the little fellows life well done!!!!
john
7:07 AM
cute
7:09 AM
oh, this is lovely!
10:55 AM
I see...your explanation/tweak really adds. Well done.
4:12 PM
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