Saturday, March 24, 2007

day aff -
the baunker
coonts's daffins




day off -
the banker
counts his daffodils

8 comments:

  1. I love this! perfect third line.

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  2. The force of habit, or an elightened banker!?:

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  3. practice makes a man perfect!

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  4. This made me smile. Its like a nursery rhyme for the working man.

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  5. oh, i love this one!

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  6. An excellent use of kigo, a very good surprise! I dare to make a suggestion regarding the prosody: day off / the banker counts / his daffodils

    Thank you for sharing.

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  7. Still counting...?:)

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